Shannon here: R.F. Whong shares insight into lessons from her editor on writing. All answers and comments will go in Monday’s drawing. Deadline: June 28th, 11:59 pm central time. Here’s. Ruth:
And-linked phrases and repetitive words in fiction
It’s hard to believe that after publishing nine fiction books and being named a 2025 Featured Author by the Minnesota Anoka County Library, I still struggle with the problematic habit of overusing “and”-linked phrases and repeating words.
My editor has repeatedly pointed out issues with my problematic habit.
* Slow down the pacing: The narrative feels sluggish due to too many and-linked phrases and repetitive words (e.g., “but”, “could”, “know”, “feel”, “think”).
* Weaken the writing: Unnecessary repetition makes the prose less powerful.
* Distract the readers: Redundancies often disrupt immersion, making readers notice the writing itself rather than the story.
Consider the following example: “She was tired, exhausted, and weary.” All three words convey nearly the same idea. The redundancy makes the narrative awkward.
Why do writers fall into this trap? Personally, I use redundant phrases when I want to heighten the emotional impact. Others might do it to imitate the patterns of spoken language. Whatever the reason, it’s a habit that can be difficult to break.
Here are a few strategies to help eliminate redundancy:
- Choose the strongest word. For example: “She was exhausted.”
- Use specific details. Instead of telling, show what tiredness looks like. For example: “She slumped in her chair.”
- Vary sentence structures: Use different sentence structures to replace “and” lists with imagery or action.
- Use intentional repetition. Sometimes repetition is effective, but it should be purposeful, not just wordy. For example: “She was tired. So very tired.”
- Read aloud. Reading the work aloud helps catch problems with awkward repetition or rhythm.
- Identify words we frequently repeat and remove unnecessary occurrences from each chapter.
As a writer, we never stop learning. Every author rewrites, refines, and relearns with each project. Be patient. The quest for clearer, more powerful prose is proof that we care about our readers—and about our art.
Question for Readers: Do you agree redundancies make you notice the writing itself rather than the story?
About Ruth: Dr. Ruth Wuwong (PhD in biochemistry, MBA in finance) has published 120+ scientific books and papers (under her legal name) and a few Christian fiction books under R. F. Whong. She lives in the Midwest with her husband, a retired pastor. They served together at three churches from 1987 to 2020. Her grown son works in a nearby city.
She currently runs a small biotech company (www.vidasym.com) and has raised more than twenty million US dollars during the past few years for Vidasym.
In addition to her weekly newsletter and the platform (www.ruthforchrist.com), she’s active in several writers’ groups, including ACFW, Word Weavers, Facebook, and Goodreads. Through these connections, she plans newsletter/promotion swaps with others and has writers endorse her books, write forewords, and host her on guest blogs.
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